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Remember when you spoke to me
about all your fantasies
And i promised i'd give them to you

Now i have failed you
I have'nt prevailed for you
I just want you to know im sorry

Graceful deathly dances
Full of broken romances
sweep across the ballroom floor tonight
Crying souls
pierced through the heart
Cry for us tonight

Broken promises
Ive made to you
Have caused you to be lost to me

I cant stand it
I can't handle it
Life has grayed with out you

Graceful deathly dances
Full of broken romances
sweep across the ballroom floor tonight
Waltzing slowly
These bones all to well know me
I cant escape the truth

I Can't say more
Your the one i adore
I don't want to loose you

For if i were too
Ever loose you
i would loose grip of it all

Graceful deathly dances
Full of broken romances
sweep across the ballroom floor tonight
Aging smiles
know all the while
i let you down tonight

Age Old Stories
Lovers Worries
float through the crowd tonight
Mov'in through the party
seeing all lost loves
at the ball of dead lovers.

Age Old Stories
Lovers Worries
float through the crowd tonight
Mov'in through the party
seeing all lost loves
at the ball of dead lovers.
Please Comment!!

These are Lyrics to a song i am working on. Been working on it for the past week. Not finished, but these lyrics have held up well enough for me to want to post them, i want to know what everyone thinks. This is a ballad, and yes its kinda sad.

Thanks for looking, I am hoping to have a recording or video, whenever its done, if your interested in seeing it just let me know in a Comment.

Thanks
-Tay
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bluehairedgirl925 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awww this is so prettyful~! yesh that's a new word >3

No but really this is so sweet and yet so sad... it really touches one.. and brings some memories... but really is so pretty ^^
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xShiirleyxKnarwall Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is pretty friken awesome O.O I like it.
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Taytayb Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2010  Professional Filmographer
Thank you so much, i am glad you liked it!!! Should have a good recoring in a few weeks!!!
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Chicky-the-Dragon Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I think this is really beautiful :love:! The only downside is that you may need to check your spelling, punctuation and captials because it looks kind of inconsistent ^^;.

Grammar etc. aside because that only makes up a part of creativity xD, I loved this :thumbsup:.
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Taytayb Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010  Professional Filmographer
Thank you Very Much!!!
Yeah, I'm not the best speller in the world, and I was writing this pretty quick, didn't really check anything....
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Chicky-the-Dragon Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
To me, it's the content that counts, not necessarily all of the grammatical things xD. :) Keep up the good work!
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ICaughtAShootingStar Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010
I wish, I could write as good as you :3
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Taytayb Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010  Professional Filmographer
:jawdrop:Thank you, that means alot!:jawdrop:
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ICaughtAShootingStar Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010
Hehe :3
Could you, read my poem "I wont change my mind" and teeell me what you thnk?
Its, mean alot
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AMWeitz Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2009  Student Writer
Haunting, beautiful, flowing, elegant, spectacular. I love this, and hope I get to hear you sing it one day. :music: :hug:
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